Wednesday, February 18, 2009

strange


stuck,
in my mind.
thoughts of change.
move into

spaces,

take what is yours.

I feel the minute.
trapped in the now.
nothing more powerful,
than breaking the silence.

Too long,
trapped in blood,
hate and pain.

Touch me once,
touch me twice,
break your mind
if you touch me trice.

I am,

nothing more to say.

12 comments:

Charles Gramlich said...

Very immediate. One can feel the blood coursing through the body in this poem.

Steve Malley said...

Nicely done, miss. Thank you!

the walking man said...

nothing more powerful,
than breaking the silence.

etain_lavena said...

Kewl thanks Charles:)

Thanks Steve:)

truth in a few words, left freedom in ones soul, right walking man?

Catvibe said...

This stanza:
I feel the minute.
trapped in the now.
nothing more powerful,
than breaking the silence.

Especially if that silence is mysterious and prolonged. Great poem. Powerful.

Life On Edge. said...

Thank you for reminding me that life is about poetry.

etain_lavena said...

Thanks Cat:)

Wow, Life thats a lovely compliment:)

the walking man said...

Etain, I am of the mind that the fewer the words that need interpretation in the mind the sharper the point.

M@ said...

Etain Lavena,

If I touched you, would you break my animal mind? :(

etain_lavena said...

walking man,Well I guess its about less is more then:)

Yes M@ I think I might be able to do that:)

laughingwolf said...

etain, that's extremely powerful

etain_lavena said...

Thank you Wolf:)