Sunday, July 01, 2007

closer


i see your skin.
trough naked eyes;
bare skin pulse.
the open body,
need to feel I can touch.
break me in,
so I can feed off you.

what is in you,
that I need so.
only pulsing lust
feel the beat,
over and over.
in and deep,
and again.

penetrate souls
believe in what this is
feel, beat.
in, out
feel, breath
more.
deep
soon
now.
break in a burst of need.

voel as ek ruk.
hoe my hart jou verruk,
genoeg is wat ek soek,
nog as ek lê,
om vergeet te word.
Breuk my in van die begin




The Afrikaans is not translated form the English;)

17 comments:

captain corky said...

Awesome!

Charles Gramlich said...

It would be nice to be able to hear these spoken, both in English and Afrikaans.

etain_lavena said...

Thanks Capitan.....It would be great Charles:)

Inconsequential said...

porno pic! yay...

err...

I mean, stunning words and beautiful image...

Verbal porn! yay...

:)

Cool stuff Etain, so what is the last bit?

feel ash ek of jolt how my heart delight you, enough are what ek soek forgets, still ash ek lê, for at becomes. Crack my of that beginning???

hmmm, not too good at translation...

Stewart Sternberg said...

etain, I am curious about the writing process for you. Do you do these at one sitting? How much rewriting is there? How much consideration for form? What do you do with your poems..do you keep them for blogging or submit them? Just curious

etain_lavena said...

whahahahaha...In a bit off.
It means:feel when I shake, how my heart is shaken,enough is what I seek,while I lie,to be forgotten,break me in from the beggining.HUGZ IN:)

Hey Stewart....for me, my poetry especialy, I put music on, sometimes the words intice me, or the beat move me. This was written on a song by NIN, it is also called closer and it is about the guy that want to basicly F%^&** like and animal...and well the beat always drives me bonkers.
Yes mostly write in one sitting, rearely think of form, i let the poem decide the form....dont send them in, would love to but dont even know where to begin...please say why your curious?

Steve Malley said...

Nice one!

Now, if you'll excuse me, I need a glass of cold water...

etain_lavena said...

whahahahah...ok Steve:)

Inconsequential said...

You let me violate you
You let me desecrate you
You let me penetrate you
You let me complicate you
:)

kinda thought they lost it with tthe last bit though...

Through every forest
Above the trees
Within my stomach
Scraped off my knees
I drink the honey, inside your hive...
You are the reason I stay alive...


well, maybe the honey bit is consistant, but it never seemed right to me...

Still, NIN are cool, many times have i tried to break my neck to head like a hole!

Inconsequential said...

Hmmm, I had meant my porn comments as humour, now I wonder just how close to the mark it was...

etain_lavena said...

hihihihih....ja in they lost the plot in the end...I love that BEAT...drives me bonkers...hihihih...
silly:)

Inconsequential said...

have you seen the film type things they did?

kinda cool/freaky...

JR's Thumbprints said...

Kiss him when you're sober.

Stewart Sternberg said...

I'm always curious about writing. I don't write poetry, just wondered how certain poets ply their craft.

etain_lavena said...

ahhhhh no In I have not, will have to see if I can get it....whoohoo..freaky is good.
No no Jr for once I am sober...hihihihih....
OO ok Stewart....
:)

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