Friday, December 08, 2006

Candy coated


She walks past the old candy store without looking that way, but she hears something scratching on the window. She looks swiftly but there is nothing, a strange sense burns within her to stand closer to the wondow. She looks inside, her breath fogs up the wondow, nothing weird in here. Just rows and rows of sweets, all the colours you can think of, red, green, orange, purple. She feels very exited all of a sudden and feels the urge to go in, but the scratching on the wondow? She stands back and stares and the kalidoscope, she will go in. She walk to the door as she opens the door, it rings a bell. She is a bit scared, but of what she is not sure.


The store must be old its got a sweet smell to it, there is a thin layer of smoke hanging it the air. On the counter lies a cat, a black one, the lazy bones does not even awake to look at her. The counter is a thick dark wood, with faces of kids carved on it, some of them look like they are screaming. Others look as if they are crying. Why would anybody want a gruesome counter top like that. She turns around and look up at all the rows and rows of sweets. Hello my deary a scratchy voice says behind her. She turns around very quickly. Behind the counter stands a little old lady, with purple hair, hunched over in a black vintage dress on. What will it be my dear? Hmmm...I want strawberry buttons mam'. Well deary how old are you? I am 12 mam'. That's a perfect age, a perfect age indeed. She mumbles to herself and stares at her with her beady little eyes. She feels so uncomfortable, being stared down like a piece of ready baked ham.

You will do just fine, you need to come with me deary. Come on follow me, she waves her hand, come on, come on. She walks after the little old lady, the ladies one leg drags behind her and it makes a shuffling sound. She feels as if she needs to run away, but there is something holding her behind the old lady. The sweet scent of candy entrances her. They get to a room that is dark and gloomy, with a rotten smell, smells sour in a way. There is moss on the walls and a big black pot in the middle of the room. The sweet smell is moving into her body, making her feel dizzy. She feels so free, her body does not even want to move one more step.

The old lady trows something over her body and start chanting something....Rara tensjha eeooommee...tatatrara....

She falls to the floor, the old lady moves the pot closer....

14 comments:

Flutopia Unchartered said...

I like it!! oohh creepy!! i'm compelled to write my own..very nice drizz your pacing is empeccable!!..go out and kick some Stephen King butt! haha!

etain_lavena said...

thanks.....hihih....I don't think I will be in his class anytime soon, but I will try!

Marra said...

Hahahhahaha...this was super. And the photo rocked. Where do you come up with your selections? Amazing!
Reads like skeleton key.

NICKNAME said...

i love it, the imagary took me away i was sucked into the shop with that lady, i don't think i can walk into a sweet shop and feel the same.

etain_lavena said...

hihihihihihi.....thanks.

How do I come up with it.I write the story, and then I am the queen of googling pics so that it fits in with the theme.

Sunny Gecko said...

Cool post... it sucks you in and leaves you wanting more... you really have an amazing talent.

cathrine the gr8 said...

more, more, more

i was there i could smell it

etain_lavena said...

whahahahah...thanks julle oukies.....i am training my brain......

Nosjunkie said...

Love this one.
keeping bussy I see
sson you'l have to work full time to keep our darma appitites at bay

Strongs to Drizzz

RA-RA

etain_lavena said...

Thanks junkie.....i will keep you appetite's at bay, keeps my mind occupied....RA RA...right back at ya.

the guy who writes this crap said...

hmm...that's some really good writing. BUT U'VE JUST FREAKED ME OUT, MAN!!! now, because of you, I will not enter another Sweets from Heaven. Thanks alot! :-D

etain_lavena said...

whahahaha...it seems like I have spoiled sweet shops for allot off people now...whahahahaha

Donsie said...

Very Well written. Well Done!!!

etain_lavena said...

Thanks Donsie